ஆண் ஆதிக்கம், பெண் உரிமை எல்லாவற்றையும் மறந்துவிட்டு கொஞ்சம் யோசித்தால் - பொதுவாக உலகத்தில் தந்தையை விட தாய்க்கு தான் புகழ் அதிகம்.
உண்மையா இல்லையா? அந்த பாதிப்பு தான் இந்த படைப்பு. இந்த மாதிரி எழுதி எனக்கு பழக்கம் இல்லை. ஆதனால் தவறு இருந்தால் மன்னிக்கவும்!
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கண்ணோடு கண் பார்த்து
மணமுடித்த எம்வாழ்வில்
கண் வைத்தது யாரென்று
சொல் இறைவா?
கழுத்தோரம் முடிபோட்டு
கரம் பிடித்த என் உயிரை
பிரித்தது ஏனென்று
சொல் தலைவா
ஒன்றுக்கு ஒன்றென்று
இரண்டை தான் கேட்டேன் நான்
நான்கை தந்துவிட்டு
மறைந்துவிட்டாள்
ஐவறும் இங்கு
ஆறாக அழுகையிலே
எழுந்தவள் சென்றது ஏன்
எட்டவில்லை!
சிதையில் எரிந்த அவள் - என்
மனதையும் எரித்தாளே
மனிதன் நான் - ஏன் மறந்தாள்
புரியவில்லை
என் அழுகை அடங்கிவிடும்
குழந்தைகள் தான் பாவமிங்கு
உடல் வற்றி நான்கு நாளாய்
ஏங்குதிங்கே
நால்வருக்கும் இனி நானே
தாயும் தகப்பனும்
விதி செய்த கோலத்தை
என் என்பேன்.!
விதியென்ன மதியென்ன
எல்லாம் உன் செயல் தான்
சதிசெய்த உன் பெயரா
கடவுள் இங்கு?
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** For Thanglish - Please see 1st comment
29 comments:
Forget MCP's Women's Lib etc. this world gives more importance to Mother than to the Father. True or not. This poem is an impact of that thought. This is my first attempt to write something different, so please apologize for the mediocrity.! or errors if any.
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Title - A Man who lost his wife
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kannodu kan paarthu
manamuditha em vazhvil
kan vaithadhu yaarendru
sol iraiva?
kazhuthoram mudi pohttu
karam piditha en uyirai
pirithadhu yaarendru
sol thalaiva
onrukku ondrendru ( 2 kids)
irandai thaan ketten naan
naankai thandhu vittu
maraindhu vittal
ivarum ingu,
aaraaga azhugayile,
ezhunthaval chendradhu aen
ettavillai
sithayil erintha aval - en
manadhaiyum erithaalae
manidhan naan - aen marandhaal
puriyavillai
en azhugai adangividum
kuzhandhaigal thaan pavamingu
udal vattri nangu naalai
engudhinge.
naalvarukkum ini naane
thaayum thagappanum
vidhi seitha kolathai
en enpen.!
vithi enna mathi enna
ellam un seyal thaan
sathi seitha un peyara
'Kadavul' Ingu?
* I am imagining a dad with 4 kids whose wife died 4 days back.
சதிசெய்த உன் பெயரா
கடவுள் இங்கு?
sometimes enakkum apdi dhaan thonudhu.
amazing post. hats off
off-post comment venkitu sir, neenga ennoda reply pakkanum for ur comment..i will comment for this post later! :) cya!
sir the poem and the emotions are so real that i tht u had experienced it!!!in a word wow!!!
What Sir, neenga enna tamil blogukku maaritingala? No more posts for me to read. Even if I try ... puriyala :(
Gayathri - No.No...I think I will go back to English from Monday on.! Sorry about that.!
Siddharth - I hope not.! God.! Anyways, I was imagining though!
G V - Umm what to do?
Venkat - Raam paatu arumai.! Vijay Yesudass.koral..innum arumai.
Prabhu - Thank you.
Narayanan: very touching indeed. you are right. at one point of time bharathi et al were trying to get equal rights for women, and during that time, the angle was to vision women in a bigger-than-life manner. men were and are just men.
seems funny and almost unreal, but men are actually under-appreciated.
Nice post.
miga arumayana varigal.manaivi ezhanthavarin thavippai kan mun neeruthi ulirgal.
Inspired anjali composed the following lines:
Veethyin sathya?
Kalathin kolaama?
Vuzhin Vazhya?
Parivuu kanbithathu
Pirivai thaangathana?
kurudai pondthu vazhvu
Karanam en karu vizhyeye nee thane.
I dont know if its correct but I love writing Tamil poems too though I'm not well versed like you. Any criticism is welcome.
*There is error in my html hence the strikes in my blog.Will set it right during weekend.
Chase:my favourites One bright summer morning.Mis shumway waves a wand ,world in my pocket,No orchids for Miss.Blandish.
super saar, nanum yosippan yedakku ladiesikku namba oorula special treatmenta? busikka cinema theatreilla, adu than romba over saar, gents line oru mozam neelam irrukkaum annal ladies lineilla varum rendu perthan irruppanga, gentsikku rendu line irrunda, seekarama valai mudiyum thana?
Arumai, Narayanan, Arumai. Aanaal onru puriyavillai. Thaaikku kidaikkum thani mariyaadhaikkum, manaiviyai izhandha oruvanin thavippirkkum enna sambandham? Baadippu ennavenru puriyavillai.
Very touching one sir..
If that Manaiviyai ilantha kanavan has kids as u said rombo kastam sir enna irunthaalum amma valartha maaathri varuma ???
Thala, how to start writing kavidhais. I guess we have to read a lot of these before getting into that league :(
Look at this man who lost his wife
What has he now got in his life?
While his grief is palpable
We wonder who is culpable -
Is it God or is it what we call fate
the one that made his wife "late"
The children now suffer
He has to be their buffer
And nothing can compensate
The grief which will only abate
Over a long period of time.
Indeed life turns on a dime!
OMG...!!!
U made me spell out these words.. :-) I never used to say these.
Nice post.. Almost got me to tears in the following lines..
'Aivarum ingu aaraaga alugaiyilae...'
'sathi seitha un peyaraa kadavul ingu?...'
Great lines..
By the way.. which tamil font/formatting u r using in Unicode? it gets tumbled up in Firefox... i had to switch to IE to view this post. And i hate switching to that thing.. :-)
Hey Kay,
Unnaiyum ennaiyum kooda amma dhaan valarthaanga.. namma olunga keeromaa..
@ Venky sir..
Im speech sorry commentless
Great piece... best of all your kavidhais so far. Very touching.
the pain is so real in your words
Ramesh,
very good one....
Preserving the original content of your lines, I revamped the middle paragraph as below with the addition of the line about "எழு பிறவி வினை களையாமல்"..this way you have every number covered from 4 through 8
நான்கை தந்து
ஐவரும் இங்கு
ஆறாக அழுகையிலே
எழு பிறவி வினை களையாமல்
எட்டும் தூரத்தை தாண்டி எட்டச் சென்றாளே !!
what do I mean by that line about 7 piravi? The late Paramacharya of Kanchi has said this in one discourse -- as much as the woman speaks about liberation, freedom etc. and complains that man is not giving her equality and justice, she should note that once she passes away, the man cannot do the homams, yagnams, etc. In other words, with her demise, his right to do those to get rid of his sins is washed away.....
Mother is the most supreme being of all, it is said that God cannot be everywhere and thats why he cast himself into the many mothers in the universe. Shankar's father (lawyer shankar) told me one day that such is the significance of the mother that she gets "40-60 Pindams" in a sraartham as compared with the very few for a father..
very touching....my attempt at writing kavidhai.
Andru sandhithom...
inaindhom
Indru sindhithom..
pirindhom
Nice one Sir.
AF
Wow! very touching.
Naryanan
I was able to see your tamil post in firefox till yesterday, but you new posting is not showing up in firefox so had to use IE
kavidhai
romba nalla irukku.
annanum thambiyum pottu thalraanga!
Gr8 work sir[s]
after ganesh's addition actually you have from 1 to 8 with 3 missing in the middle... trying to add something for 3... just a try for me.. after 4-5 years in tamil writing.. so pls forgive if anything is wrong...
"onrukku ondrendru ( 2 kids)
irandai thaan ketten naan
muthevarum vaazhtha (with blessings)
naankai thandhu vittu"
hope it makes sense ;)
tt_giant - Even though there are a lot of problems for women in Desilands, still I feel that Men lose out
in several places.
Anjali - Good attempt, looks like you can write well in tamil as well. Hats off.!
Chase - No stone for Danny fisher, You find him I'll fix him. ( forgot..after that)
Srivatsan - Time will change, It will all be good.! That's my humble feeling.
gandalf_the_gay - Ilakkiyam, Ilakkanam, kaaviyam, everywhere English Tamil..any language, Mother is God. Mother is
everything..nothing wrong..its ok. But konjamaavadhu Fatherskkum solla koodadhaah. Appidi enna fathers onnume
pannardhu illayah. Times have changed. Fathers do as much as mothers ( almost ). Look at the Oscars, Grammy's or
any other functions like that...mostly it is...'I Thank my mom'. Dad..is very rare..!
Kay - amma payyana nee? iru iru..onga appa kitta pesaren.
Jayan - Peelings irundhaal thaana varum. Honestly, I haven't read a lot....that's the truth, I listen to a lot
of songs and by gods grace..I remember some tamil.
Thennavan - Very good one in English.! Ammani inspirationah? ( Life turns on a Dime....true..true..true)
Magnus Astrum - I am honored my friend - I cried as well...when I wrote.! Peelings...vandhuduchu.! I remembered the Movie
Mahanadhi.! About the font, I downloaded firefox today...The post didn't show up ok....( Even Balaji mentioned about it
not sure how to handle this) I use UNICODE-UTF-8
ioiio - Unga rendu per phone number kudunga...Unga appa kitta pesanum.!
@ Venky - Pesu venky..Pesu..!! Un comment ennum inba vellathil Neendha ododi vandha ennai
emmatraadhae...please.!
Chakra Sampath - Thanks Chakra ...ellam ungal inspirations dhaan.!s
visithra - Partly inspired by my favorite movie - Mahanadhi
Grey Vampire - Thanks sir, I'll do it tomorrow...for sure.
Ganesh Venkittu - Thanks da. Nice lines indeed. I haven't read Paramacharya and
haven't spoken to Shankar's dad about all this. Good to know.!
Anonymous - Your words are in my heart. Wonderful indeed. Short and Crisp.
AF / kaleidoscope - Thank you
Ganesh - Sorry about that. I downloaded firefox just for you and Magnus. Like you said, even with unicode utf-8 encoding
It doesn't work. Not sure what to do.! Thanks for your efforts to read my kavidhai.
JaganLee - Thank you. Honestly, It was a big coincidence. I didn't know that Father's day is on Sunday when I
wrote it.!
ioiio - Annan Jujubee dhaan! Thank you
Nep - Did I forget 3...umm Yes I did..!! Thanks for pointing it out.!! And I liked your attempt.
Good work.!!!
kalakiteenga sir...and thanks for tha tanglish version .......
Mr.Narayanan
Wonderful kavithai on the widower. Fabulous. And your brother Gaensh's suggestions were also too good.
Ram / Me
Thank you very much
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